The Stalker's Sonnet

My daughter Becca is putting together a writing portfolio for her high school English class. To get an A, one of the requirements is to include an original sonnet. She asked me if I knew what a sonnet was. I had to admit that other than its connection with Shakespeare, I could not remember the details. I knew it had something to do with "iambic pentameter" but I wasn't going to bring that up 'lest she ask me to define it.

I told her I would do some research and get back with her. Dummies.com has a great little summary on writing a sonnet, explaining both iambic pentameter and classic Shakespearean rhyming patterns. 

I was intrigued. I have never written a sonnet. It is about time to remedy that deficit. Here is my first attempt:

Stalker

I shamble through this life with some unease
Regardless of the beauty in the skies,
Nor seeing much that's fair on land or seas,
For only you find favor in my eyes.

I've seen the diamond shimer in the sun,
The emerald grace the brow of foreign gods,
The rubies cut and gleaming for the one
Whose smile did shame them all as mere facades.

The world may call me strange or blind or mad
To miss so much that others see as fair.
To me they seem but frivolous and sad
Compared to thee. Oh, let me stop and stare.

Just let me keep thy vision in my mind,
For earthly sights have never been so kind.

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I think the form and meter are right. The question is, "How does it make you feel?"